EVALUATION

EVALUATION:

Ideas

I think that the author’s ideas were very clear, and he had very good themes. He talked a lot about racism, abuse, and other issues that effect people in the world. Crutcher also, throughout the book, tried to describe the way the character’s felt about each topic.

Organization

I think that the author organized the book very well. I think that possibly some sentence structure could have been paid more attention to, but overall it was okay. I think that something that might have helped the reader would have been to put it in complete chronological order, and also mayeb put more events in the story.

Voice

The author used voice well. I think that putting into the journal form really helped you know that he was trying to make it sound like the author, or that the words, were coming from a teenager, or someone we could “relate” to.

Word Choice

I think the author, with the time period I think he was going for, used very good words. I think that sometime, actually a lot of time, I think that he edited himslef (with using curse words atleast) by just saying other expressions, which in many teens isnt true. Im not exactly saying that he should have sworn more, but it definatly didn’t sound like a teen on the swearing aspect, and very censored for a junior’s journal.

Sentence Fluency

I think that the author had decent sentence fluency. I think that throughout some of the book, he could had worded things differently, or could have structured the sentence better. I think that he was sometimes unclear, and I, several time, had to re-read sentences to try to fully understand them, which Im sure that if someone else tried to read this, they could also have the same troubles as me, or possibly more.

Conventions

I think that author used all the spelling and grammer correctly, and also had a somewhat good flow of the words.

Presentation

I think that the author, or whomever chose the cover of the book STOTAN! Possibly should have made it maybe look a little more dramtic, like possibly the scene of Jeff in the hospital bed, or Nortie’s beaten face, or something more symbolic about something besided swimming, something with a little more intensity. I think that on the inside of the book though, the presentation was good, and having it in a journal form was a pretty okay idea.